A Moment In Time

A Moment in time by Paige H

‘SPLASH!!’ as I flew down the slide with Jamie and Dannii. Jamie was in the front, I was in the middle and Dannii was behind me. Jamie was being silly and he did a pose as if he was meditating. Dannii looked at him and laughed and did it as well.

I fell over and ended up backwards on my back. When we got to a certain part of the slide there was a big curve and it pushed Jamie, Dannii and I up the side of the slide. “WEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!” I yelled with laughter.

When we got to the end of the slide we wanted to do it again so we did, this time Jaden joined in so Jamie, Jaden, Dannii and I all ran up the stairs.

This time the boys were at the back trying to walk down the slide me and Dannii just slid down on our bums, then all of a sudden ‘CRASH!!’ As Caitlin Jaden and Jamie crashed into me and Dannii.

Finally we got to the end of the slide everybody was relieved. LUNCH TIME!! Mrs Lowe yelled. We all ran over to get lunch.

What a day Fun day that was.

I hope we get to go again sometime.

Reflection

1. Grab the audience at the beginning
2. Have at least 5-6 paragraphs and more supporting detail in them.
3. Have good action, describing words.
4. Have speech marks, exclamation marks,Question marks commas./Punctuation
5. Have some complex sentences.   

WALT Add Humor To Our Writing

Thank you letter

To Anna

Thank you Anna for coming to camp we loved you helping at camp.

My Highlight was Going to the river and tubing down in the current and also the life jackets was really FUN for me. When I went on the mudslide I hurt my bum. After a while I got used to it. When I got to the end of the river on the tube I felt like I was about to fall down a waterfall edge.

Here is a little poem I wrote for you for all your help at room 1211’s Camp Omatua Trip

Thoughtful

Helping hand

Amazing cook

Nice and caring

Keeping us happy

Super kind

Awsome friend

Noticed everybody

Nursed us when we were hurt

A lovely person

Many Thanks

Paige Holloway