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A Moment In Time

A Moment in time by Paige H

‘SPLASH!!’ as I flew down the slide with Jamie and Dannii. Jamie was in the front, I was in the middle and Dannii was behind me. Jamie was being silly and he did a pose as if he was meditating. Dannii looked at him and laughed and did it as well.

I fell over and ended up backwards on my back. When we got to a certain part of the slide there was a big curve and it pushed Jamie, Dannii and I up the side of the slide. “WEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!” I yelled with laughter.

When we got to the end of the slide we wanted to do it again so we did, this time Jaden joined in so Jamie, Jaden, Dannii and I all ran up the stairs.

This time the boys were at the back trying to walk down the slide me and Dannii just slid down on our bums, then all of a sudden ‘CRASH!!’ As Caitlin Jaden and Jamie crashed into me and Dannii.

Finally we got to the end of the slide everybody was relieved. LUNCH TIME!! Mrs Lowe yelled. We all ran over to get lunch.

What a day Fun day that was.

I hope we get to go again sometime.

Reflection

1. Grab the audience at the beginning
2. Have at least 5-6 paragraphs and more supporting detail in them.
3. Have good action, describing words.
4. Have speech marks, exclamation marks,Question marks commas./Punctuation
5. Have some complex sentences.   

Summarising - Polar Bears

Summarising - Polar Bears: Surviving in the Arctic Paired/Small group Writing

The main idea of this text is to tell you how polar bears make a den to survive in the arctic

One example of a supporting detail is snow builds up against cie and makes a snowdrift. Polar bears use their large powerful claws to dig a tunnel into the ice.

Another supporting detail is the den is usually about 2 meters long and big enough for one or two polar bears

Finally it is clear that the main idea is to tell you how polar bears make a den in the arctic to survive